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Friday, 26 October 2012

The zombies

   
                                                    The zombies                                  
     One day there was a man called Marcel he was living in  a flat.He was 20 years old.That night there was something creeping out of the grave,it was a hand, it all started in the graveyard. Body`s was popping up one made a sound it woke Marcel up he quickly, got out of bed  he said,"  what is that?" then Marcel`s phone vibrated it was his friend Sam. Sam said," are you seeing what I`m seeing?" Marcel replied," yes I am." Sam said,"can you get to mind?" Marcel said," I`ll try to get to yours."  
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  1. Anonymous29 October 2012 at 16:48

    A few spelling misteaks.good piece of work.from megan

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  2. Fiona (Team100WC)1 November 2012 at 09:41

    Gosh, Shaelon, what a terrible nightmare experience Marcel had! I can see that you are making great effort to use speech marks correctly: keep it up. As you develop as a writer, try to check that you have used full stops and commas so that sentences don't overflow into each other.

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