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The train is puffing and smoking
the dog is waiting to go for a walk
the plants are beautiful
the people are waiting to get on the train
the houses are lovely
Luke, I can see that you have thought carefully about the words which clearly describe different scenes within the picture - keep it up! Next time try to remember capitals and full stops for your sentences too.
Great adjectives, Luke. We felt like we were there! I love the use of short snappy sentences, but to make it even better try to put capital letters and full stops.
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Luke, I can see that you have thought carefully about the words which clearly describe different scenes within the picture - keep it up! Next time try to remember capitals and full stops for your sentences too.
ReplyDeleteGreat adjectives, Luke. We felt like we were there! I love the use of short snappy sentences, but to make it even better try to put capital letters and full stops.
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well done luke that is great i give it 5 stars *****
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