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Thursday, 18 October 2012
The girls who snuck out
One cold winters night there was a strange little girl who had just moved to southend, from a strange village that nobody knows. She was at the park past her curfew, with a friend. Molly was her friend, she had black wavy hair. Molly is in foster care with Catlin . The went to the park and in they made a den in the woods . They were chilling out on the sofa that they stolen from a woman's garden . Out of nowhere they heard a strange noise from behind Catlin whisper in a chiiling way, ”What was that?”. They never went out past their curfew again!
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hi abbey it is amber this is the best thing that i have read day
ReplyDeleteHello Abbey, thank you for writing this for the 100WC. I liked the way you began your story as it gave me a clear idea of the setting in my mind. i think that you tried to pack a bit much into the 100 words; it is fine to leave the writing on a cliffhanger rather than to try and finish the story. Keep on writing .
ReplyDeleteWhat a great tale with such tension Abbey! Really scary! Thank you for joining the 100WC this time!
ReplyDeletenice vocab did the girl get in a ice block oh no
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