Thursday, 18 October 2012

The girls who snuck out

One  cold winters night there was a strange little girl who had just moved to southend, from a strange village that nobody knows. She was at the park past her curfew, with a friend. Molly was her friend, she had black wavy hair. Molly is in foster care with Catlin . The went to the park and in they made a den in the woods . They were chilling out on the sofa that they stolen from a woman's garden . Out of nowhere they heard a strange noise from behind Catlin whisper in a chiiling way, ”What was that?”. They never went out past their curfew again!

5 comments:

  1. hi abbey it is amber this is the best thing that i have read day

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  2. Mrs Halford Team 100WC21 October 2012 at 16:54

    Hello Abbey, thank you for writing this for the 100WC. I liked the way you began your story as it gave me a clear idea of the setting in my mind. i think that you tried to pack a bit much into the 100 words; it is fine to leave the writing on a cliffhanger rather than to try and finish the story. Keep on writing .

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  3. What a great tale with such tension Abbey! Really scary! Thank you for joining the 100WC this time!

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  4. nice vocab did the girl get in a ice block oh no

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