Thursday 21 June 2012

The big giant mouse.

Chapter 1

In a hole under the ground lived a baby mouse. At 08:00 the mum came to give the baby mouse some cheese for its breakfast. After breakfast the mummy mouse was gone.
  the little one was a sleep when mummy mouse was gone.
Then he went out to find his mom and give her back his worms what he didn't want.Then the mouse's name was bill. Then had a note from a little owl and it was about his mum, it said that  dangouses creature killed her by eating with a big owl, then bill felt really upset of his mother.The next moring bill was strange because yesterday he was getting big but now he is really big.


5 comments:

  1. This punctuation is poor from u Lewis u should be doing better apart from that its good

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  2. HOW MUCH ROOM DO YOU NEED BARDEN

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  3. At least he turned big but it was so sad when the mum was killed by the owl the owl is dangerous creature the small mouse who turned big might be killed next so he can give his smaller brother cheese when the big one dies when the small one dies there will be no one will be at the house next

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  4. wow what a fascinating story to read!

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  5. It think that the book is a really good also we are as a class we are reading the wiches

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